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Post by The Unknown on Dec 15, 2010 4:48:05 GMT -5
Smart Ass needs anger management classes, asap. And a bit of humiliation would do good too. >w> But I still like how you portray him. His accent, and his speech impediment, and his way of speaking- you're doing great. Same thing with Greasy. Lol, love Wheezy there, with his tiny unnoticed smirk. X3 Ohohohn~ What's Greasy up to? ,:3 I hope he's not trying to pick Sam up, that'd make him a pedophile. Lmao, laughed out loud at the moldy sandwich gag at the end. XD I've always thought of Greasy as the kind of toon that would pull off pranks whenever he was bored or had the opportunity. He seems like the type that would do that...at least to me. Also, since having a child as a maid is an interesting case, he can't help but pick on her. So NO, he doesn't have any nasty plans. If Sam had been an attractive adult...then maybe. He's got his standards - no kids. Oh, and don't worry about Smart Ass. Karma will bite him hard. When and how? You'll have to wait and find out. Also, don't forget that my fic is set months before WFRR.  |
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Post by Fisi on Dec 15, 2010 19:02:31 GMT -5
Yeah, but I really can't wait. :3
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Post by The Forgoten One on Dec 16, 2010 15:51:48 GMT -5
story is heating up
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Post by The Unknown on Dec 16, 2010 22:27:35 GMT -5
I guess while I'm still working on the next chapter I'll let you guys in on a quick trivia...
What inspired Sam was actually this song
And no, it's not because the film is about an orphan who lives with a couple of dogs. The song itself is just so beautiful and sad...and that's when Sam came in. A drenched, frustrated, and lonely Sam. I couldn't help myself but take her by the hand and lead her out of the storm.
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Post by disneyplease on Dec 16, 2010 22:32:24 GMT -5
aw, thats nice and hey what a coincidence, I use music for inspiration too!!!  DisneyPlease! |
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Post by Weasel Freak on Dec 16, 2010 22:43:46 GMT -5
Smart Ass needs anger management classes, asap. And a bit of humiliation would do good too. >w> But I still like how you portray him. His accent, and his speech impediment, and his way of speaking- you're doing great. Same thing with Greasy. Lol, love Wheezy there, with his tiny unnoticed smirk. X3 Ohohohn~ What's Greasy up to? ,:3 I hope he's not trying to pick Sam up, that'd make him a pedophile. Lmao, laughed out loud at the moldy sandwich gag at the end. XD I've always thought of Greasy as the kind of toon that would pull off pranks whenever he was bored or had the opportunity. He seems like the type that would do that...at least to me. Also, since having a child as a maid is an interesting case, he can't help but pick on her. So NO, he doesn't have any nasty plans. If Sam had been an attractive adult...then maybe. He's got his standards - no kids. Oh, and don't worry about Smart Ass. Karma will bite him hard. When and how? You'll have to wait and find out. Also, don't forget that my fic is set months before WFRR. Yaaay! To both paragraphs!  |
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Post by disneyplease on Jan 7, 2011 12:15:43 GMT -5
by the way Unknown, heres a question about the fic that I Always wanted to ask you in the story, do the weasels physically abuse Sam and make her work extra hard, or am I going to have to wait and see  DisneyPlease! |
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Post by The Unknown on Jan 7, 2011 17:45:42 GMT -5
You have to wait and see. I'm a bit busy on my end due to work, duty and a rocky relationship. I'll do the best I can to upload the next chapter. I'm just having a hard time trying to start it. I know how I want the fic to flow and how it'll end, but it's the third chapter I'm having trouble with 'cause I don't want to rush to story. Give me a while and I'll have something once I figure this out.
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Post by The Forgoten One on Jan 7, 2011 17:46:28 GMT -5
take your time Unknown good stories take time
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Post by The Unknown on Jan 7, 2011 17:50:40 GMT -5
take your time Unknown good stories take time I just wanted to quote this 'cause it's 100% true. To everyone out there, especially disneyplease, don't ever rush a story just to put it away and please everyone. Rushing your story usually makes it very sloppy. It's better to take it slowly so you can observe what's going on so that you get a better understanding of where your story is going on how the characters are evolving. Thanks jnt737! |
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Post by The Forgoten One on Jan 7, 2011 22:21:01 GMT -5
welcome
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Post by The Unknown on Jan 18, 2011 23:10:02 GMT -5
Ok so I'm having difficulty finishing the chapter due to an upcoming advancement exam in March. I'm doing my best to get this story updated and to my liking, but it's hard when I have to study. So far I'll put this small section up until I can get the rest finished (hopefully tonight. Sorry for the long delay everyone! It'll all pay off IF and WHEN I rank up!
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Orphan
Chapter 3
It was quite the nasty predicament Sam had gotten herself into. The Weasels were determined to inflict harm on her as they chased her around the room. Stupid and Psycho were whacking the floor with spiked clubs, Greasy tried to stomp on her with his big shoes, and Wheezy's cigarette smoked filled the room. Chaos had engulfed reality. It suddenly felt as if the room was growing; "no," Sam thought. She was shrinking. She kept shrinking and shrinking and shrinking until she became wedged in a crack on the floorboard. Sam struggled to get loose and escape the destruction that was closing in on her. Soon the world became dark. Sam looked up and wasface-to-face with the muzzle from Smart Ass's gun. He looked down at her and sneered. "Peek-a-boo," Smart Ass whispered as he pulled the trigger. Sam opened her mouth, but her screams were drowned out by the sound the gun made.
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Post by The Forgoten One on Jan 18, 2011 23:12:31 GMT -5
wow intense part keep up the good work
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Post by Lola on Jan 18, 2011 23:15:38 GMT -5
Oh I like the dream sequence...its a dream right?
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Post by The Unknown on Jan 18, 2011 23:25:14 GMT -5
Yes
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