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[Eternity]

Here's a sneak peek at my fic:

“So, what’s your name, kid?” Smart Guy asked.

Before she could stop herself, Maddy answered his question. “Maddy Valiant,” she replied.

At the mention of her name, the weasels’ attitude changed. The expression on each ghostly toon face became one of anger. Narrowing his eyes, Smart Guy drew closer to Maddy, so that they were almost nose to toon nose.

“Did you say…Valiant?” he asked, his voice dripping with hostility.
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break, now Maddy is arguing with the weasels, saying that they got what they deserved:

"Jeepers! Attacking an unarmed little girl, th-th-that's not good form!" Roger said nervously.

"Good form?" Smart Guy said in a low voice. "GOOD FORM?!!" he shouted, "Did Valiant show good form when he did this to us?!"

"You brought it on yourselves!" Maddy shouted, "You tried to kill my grandpa and Roger! And then you helped Doom try to wipe out Toon Town so he could build his stupid freeway! You betrayed your fellow toons!!"

"Look Nina, we were just following orders!" Greasy snarled.

[Veggirl]

Looks good. Hopefully, Maddy and the weasel's will become friends.

[netske]

I hope it too.

[Eternity]

Thanks, but I wonder what the weasels would do when Maddy tells them her name? Would they attack her or what?

I'm also trying to develop a backstory for the weasels, like figuring out why they joined Doom and stuff. Which leads me to wonder: did the weasels know Doom was a toon in disguise?

[gardevoir]

Wow, I'm starting to get interested in this fan fic!! I hope you'll write them soon!!

[Eternity]

admin said:

Looks good. Hopefully, Maddy and the weasel's will become friends.

Well, if they want to get Toon Town's joy back, they'll have to learn to work together, right?

[Eternity]

In my story, the weasels haunt the acme factory. They were denied entry into Heaven because of their evil deeds in life, and are sentenced to haunt the factory for all eternity unless and until they find a human in the greatest need of help. What do you think? This story has a surprise twist at the end, but I'm not telling what it is!