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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 0:03:31 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 0:03:31 GMT -5
Well, I finished my first FanFic "Heaven's Choice". This is the sequel "Alive". Enjoy.
[shadow=red,left,300]Preface[/shadow]
The lights in Hollywood glowed brightly at night. In the park, where the leaves were of different colors, a ferret and weasel looked around.
The weasel was a male. With brown fur covering his body while white fur coverered his muzzle and chest. He wore a black fandora over his head while a black dress shirt covered him, a white tie neatly in place. His violet eyes blinked over at his companion.
The ferret was a femle. Light blue fur covered her body while midnight blue hair flowed from her hair. She wore a white dress shirt with a maroon beret on her head. Her blue eyes looked over at the male and she asked, "Where are we, Sly?"
"I don't know, Aqua."
They stared off into Hollywood...
The reason the preface is so short is because my computer is being slow. Sorry.
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 6:38:22 GMT -5
Post by Greasy on Jul 5, 2009 6:38:22 GMT -5
Oh, I know this problem, hehe.
Good start so far. Who are they? Good, bad?
Think we just have to find that out.LOL!
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 10:30:49 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 10:30:49 GMT -5
Thanks for replying. ;D
[shadow=red,left,300]One[/shadow] As a "boom" came from the kitchen, followed by Smart Guy yelling, "Psycho!", Jazz turned to her older blue brother, Wheezy, and said, "Sometimes, I think you're the most mature." As Psycho came running in, giggling, Jazz blinked before she said, "Make that all the time..." Smart Guy came in grumbling. He glared at Psycho before saying, "Get in the Dodge." "Why?" Jazz asked, standing up. "We got two Toons to get." *** Jazz held on to the seat tightly as the Dodge made a tight turn. The car in front of them, some red car, swirled to the right as a female voice said, "Pull over, it's the cops!" "I can see that!" a male voice yelled back. The car finally stopped and the Dodge pulled over next to it. Jazz crawled out, glad to be alive, and looked up. The male was a weasel. Violet eyes showed he just wanted to get this over with. The female glared at them and, to Jazz, looked a little like Wheezy at the moment with that blue fur. As Jazz looked closer, she saw the female was a ferret, like her.
All I can put at the moment. Hope you liked it. |
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 11:47:26 GMT -5
Post by Greasy on Jul 5, 2009 11:47:26 GMT -5
Ahh, this are the 2 toons in the first part you posted. What they have done, throwing dynamit TNT into the weasel´s kitchen?
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 12:30:30 GMT -5
Post by cooper on Jul 5, 2009 12:30:30 GMT -5
Hmm.....those two seems like they could be the parents of Jazz  Anyway, wonderful chapter Lynx!! Sorry i couldn't be on here earlier |
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 12:43:11 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 12:43:11 GMT -5
Lol, that be funny, but no. The "boom" earlier was Psycho blowing up breakfast. ;D
[shadow=red,left,300]Two[/shadow]
Jazz watched as the weasel cleared his throat, "What is the problem, officer?"
"The problem is that you stole that car." Smart Guy said, pointing to the red car.
"No, we didn't. Some fat cat gave it to us." the ferret said, still glaring.
Seconds later, Veronica pulled up. The she-wolf walked over to Smart Guy and whispered something in his ear. He grumbled something before telling Jazz something.
Jazz nodded and walked over to the two Toons.
"Um...It seems there has been a mistake. The cat who gave you that car stole it. He was just captured." Jazz said.
"Why didn't your boss come over and tell us?" the ferret asked.
"He was embarrassed." she said, figuring it was simpler than going into detail.
"So...can we go?" the weasel asked.
Jazz glanced at both of them, noting the ferret was staring at her very closely.
"Yes." Jazz said.
"What's your name?" the ferret asked, stopping the weasel from moving.
"Um...Jazz."
The weasel glanced at her before taking the ferret's hand and saying, "Well, it was nice meeting you, Jazz. C'mon, Aqua."
Aqua stopped him again. "Now wait a minute, Sly. Jazz...short for...Jasmine?"
"Yes."
Before Aqua could say more, Sly pushed her away. Leaving Jazz to wonder...
End of Two...
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 13:05:09 GMT -5
Post by Greasy on Jul 5, 2009 13:05:09 GMT -5
I understand why Jazz is wondering now. I do aswell....LOL.
Seems that they know her from somewhere.
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 14:29:18 GMT -5
Post by cooper on Jul 5, 2009 14:29:18 GMT -5
OKAY NOW I KNOW SOMETHING IS HAPPENING!!! The suspense!! D:<
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 14:32:46 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 14:32:46 GMT -5
As Jazz walked in the Toon Patrol's house and sat on the couch, the door opened and Olly Quinn came storming in with Greasy following her and talking quickly in Spanish.
Jazz flinched as she heard a door slam and Greasy cuss in Spanish.
"Where have you been?" Smart Guy growled.
"Trying to impress a stubborn Italian!" he yelled the last part.
"Hispanic pervert!" Olly yelled back.
"Burn." Wheezy said, smirking.
As Greasy glared at him, Jazz rolled her eyes and muttered, "Brothers."
"Where's Psycho? He never got in the Dodge." Wheezy said, chewing on his cigarette and looking around.
Seconds later, Psycho came rolling down the stairs with Zaria, giggling.
"Psycho! Quit fooling around with Witch Cat!" Smart Guy said.
When Psycho still stayed by Zaria, Smart Guy muttered, "Only me, Wheezy-"
"Huh?" Wheezy asked, quickly taking his hand off Stella.
Smart Guy glared and said, "Me, Jazz, and Stupid are the only ones not distracted by girls or, in Jazz's case, Cyril."
"Um...actually, Smart Guy, I have a date with Cyril later..." Jazz said.
"Forget it!" Smart Guy went to his room and slammed the door.
I felt like putting this...
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 14:33:41 GMT -5
Post by cooper on Jul 5, 2009 14:33:41 GMT -5
Lawl.... I love Wheezy. "Burn." XDD
Poor SA, he really needs to get himself a girl >:3 I don't even have to ask what Greasy did and what Wheezy was planning XD
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'Ello, my giggling maniac friend.
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 15:41:44 GMT -5
Post by Giggles on Jul 5, 2009 15:41:44 GMT -5
luving the fanfic so far!!!!!!!!!!!
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 15:51:31 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 15:51:31 GMT -5
I forgot to put THREE in three.... -_-'
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 17:05:15 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 17:05:15 GMT -5
[shadow=red,left,300]FouR[/shadow]
Jazz leaned her head on Cyril's shoulder, saying, "I enjoyed lunch, Cyril."
Cyril smiled, leaning his head down on Jazz's while wrapping his arm around her.
A flash of light came from an alley and seconds later, Halo came walking out.
"Halo?" Jazz asked, walking up to him.
Halo montioned for them to come here. When they got in the alley, Halo said, "I have some...bad news. It seems when...MC transfered all the files, he unlocked some that were locked or some that were lost," he took out one file, "Like Sylvester and Aquamarie."
Jazz took the file and blinked at it. "Sylvester and Aquamarie?"
"Better known as Sly and Aqua...or....your parents..."
Cue thriller music.
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 18:05:47 GMT -5
Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 5, 2009 18:05:47 GMT -5
Okay, before I go into the fifth chapter, I would like to ask something. I've seen some pictures of Jazz and I'm happy that people will draw her and it also gives me an idea of how people see her. Well, I was wondering if anyone would like to draw any other OC. They don't have to, I would just like to see how you guys see them. Also another note. I want to give Sly a white vest and Aqua a black trench coat. Don't ask why...I just felt like...they had to have them... Anyway, back to the FanFic. (Cue Da, da, da, da! music)
[shadow=red,left,300]FiVe[/shadow] Jazz stared at Halo for a long time. "What?" "You see, Sly and Aqua were Rob's first creations. He originally wanted it to be a weasel and ferret family. He lost their files years ago and, doing that, lost them. He then decided to start over and just make a child ferret," he pointed at Jazz, "you. Then you died and Rob finally got the idea to make Toons that are hero, yet bad in a way. The Toon Patrol. Before he could scan them, Doom...well, you know." Jazz stared at him. "So....technically, Sly and Aqua are me and the Toon Patrol's parents...?" "Well, yes, but your design and personality is based off of them more than anything." Halo said. Jazz looked at the file before looking back at Halo. "What's the matter with them?" "Nothing, I'm just saying that their file was lost. It came back when.....MC transfered all the other files. If this happened to them, that means other files that were lost or locked away are released." Halo said. "And...?" Cyril asked, raising an eyebrow. "Well, some of these locked files are dangerous." "How so?" "There was an artist that used to work for Maroon called Van Blankly. He was great at making horror film cartoons, but, as the popularity for funny cartoons grew, children didn't want to see horror. Maroon fired him. So, Blankly got his revenge by making the most scariest or creepiest Toons you could think of. Back when I was on the force, we got them all and locked them away, but it took a long time, I'll tell you that. Anyway, we locked them away and now-" "They're free." Jazz finished. "Yes. Look, I need-" Halo began. "Oh, no. We already fought ShadowChasers, the cops, Toons from the underworld, and a crazy Toon cat! We are not doing this!" Cyril said. *** "I can't believe we're doing this." Cyril said as he crossed his arms. Jazz rolled her eyes and said, "Don't worry, Halo. We'll help." "Thank you." With that, Halo flew back to heaven as Cyril grumbled.
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Alive
Jul 5, 2009 19:00:35 GMT -5
Post by cooper on Jul 5, 2009 19:00:35 GMT -5
I KNEW THEY WERE HER PARENTS!!!! HAHAHAHA!!! I wonder how this'll end up now |
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