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Post by kishi on Jul 1, 2009 9:13:10 GMT -5
Yeah. I got that Eddie's making the price really high because he doesn't want to help the weasels.
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 10:52:14 GMT -5
Okay hommes, after deciding to change the money to 100, I thought about given Jazz of love interest. I hope you guys won't mind that, I just thought it would be kinda cool. Here's chapter eighteen. _________________________________________________
Chapter Eighteen
After Eddie had found a place in the apartment for the Toon Patrol, Olly, Stella, and Jazz to stay and Halo an Monoke left, Jazz walked out into the alley, making sure no one saw her that could report the police and sat on a trashcan. She put her head in her hands in sighed. "How the heck am I going to get 100 bucks...?" she asked herself. She told Smart Guy she would get the money when he almost threw a fit at Eddie's price when they left. How is unknown to Jazz. "100 bucks? That's all?" Jazz jumped, landing in the trashcan and looked out to see a fox looking out from under a dumpster. He crawled out and Jazz cocked her head to the side, saying, "Yeah..." His fur was the color of fire while instead of a white tipped tail, he had a blue tipped tail. The fur on top his head was tipped with black while his eyes were like emeralds. He wore a white muscle shirt with black pants. He crossed his arms and said, "Well, I have a job that pays 200. We can split it if you help me." "O...kay, but why help me? I don't even know you." Jazz said. The fox smiled. "My name is Cyril Clyde." Jazz cocked her head to the side and, without thinking, said, "Jazz Ricci." Jazz blinked and thought for a moment. Cyril raised an eyebrow at her and asked, "What's wrong?" "My name...I just said my last name..." "Okay, so?" Jazz, too happy to care she just met Cyril, told him all that happened. When she was done, the fox stared at her, mouth agape. He shook his head and said, "Doesn't matter. I could care less who the cops chase. Just don't mention it to Mr. Glenn." Cyril started walking out and Jazz caught up to him, asking, "Mr. Glenn?" "At the moment, my boss. Only for this one job, though. He's loaded with money." Cyril said. "Oh. Um...what's the job? I want to know what I'm doing." Cyril smiled. "We just have to pack crates full of cigarettes into trucks." Jazz rolled her eyes. Cyril stopped and looked at her for a minute, cocking his head to the side. He gently took her long hair and put it in her hoodie before he lifted the hood and pulled it over her head, almost covering her eyes. "There, that will help if anyone comes who might call the fizz." he said. "The...fizz?" she asked. "Cops." Jazz blushed and was glad Cyril turned before he could see. She quickly said, "Thanks," and Cyril nodded. Walking down the streets with Cyril made her feel protected...It was something Jazz never felt. Yes, with her brothers, Olly, and Stella, she felt protected, but this...was different in some way. As Cyril stopped in front of a warehouse where a large truck was, he turned to Jazz and said, "This is it." Jazz blinked and looked at it. She turned back to Cyril and crossed her arms, saying, "Okay, now tell me why you really said I could come and we could split the money." Due to his fiery fur, Jazz didn't see Cyril blush as he said, "You have a pretty face. ...And you looked like you needed help." Cyril quickly turned and Jazz felt herself blush again. Working, they discovered that Cyril was the strongest and should lift them in the truck while Jazz was faster and should bring the boxes with the two-wheeler. Pretty soon, both fox and ferret sat on the truck, waiting for Mr. Glenn. Cyril turned to Jazz and smiled. "Thank, Jazz. It was a lot faster with you." Jazz nodded, not sure what to say to him. Minutes later, a red car came driving in front of them. Cyril jumped down and said, "Hi, Mr. Glenn," as a rather fat man came out of the car. Mr. Glenn smiled and nodded. After he gave Cyril the money, the fox grabbed Jazz's hand and ran off. He stopped when they were out back at the alley and gave Jazz the her share. She looked at it before taking her hood off an saying, "Thank you. You really helped." Cyril nodded and cleared his throat before he asked, "Um...hey, Jazz, I know we just met and all, but...um, would you like to...go...out?" Jazz cocked her head to the side. "Like...on a date?" "Y-yeah." Jazz smiled and nodded saying, "Pick me up tomorrow around nine a.m. 'K?" "Where do you live?" he asked, his eyes looking a little happier. "Over there in that apartment. Second floor. 101." Cyril smiled and, before he left, Jazz kissed him on the cheek and ran off, smiling. Cyril stood there, staring and blushing. _________________________________________________ Well, there you go. I hope you guys don't mind I gave Jazz a love interest. It was just the best way I could think of to make money. That, and I kinda thought Jazz needed of BF. What do you guys think of Cyril Clyde? Btw-Jazz's last name comes from who I think her voice actor should be, Christina Ricci.
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Post by cooper on Jul 1, 2009 11:06:34 GMT -5
He looks like a wonderful character and an awesome bf for Jazz! Can't wait for the next chapter!! (srry can't post much on itouch)
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Post by Greasy on Jul 1, 2009 11:45:21 GMT -5
I like it, he semms to be a nice guy. And the way he shared his money with her was very gentleman like. Think the other weasels are happy that the money question makes no worries anymore.
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 12:32:32 GMT -5
Here is chapter nineteen. I'm really happy you guys like Cyril! ;D I was worried for a minute. Anyway, here is their date. _________________________________________________
Chapter Nineteen
The door knocked at Jazz walked into the living room of the apartment she shared with her brothers, Olly, and Stella. Jazz cocked her head at the scene she saw. Cyril was in the middle of a circle where her brothers stood. Smart Guy and Greasy had their switchblades out while Wheezy had his Tommy gun and Stupid has his bat and Psycho had his razor. "So you're Cyril Clyde?" asked Smart Guy. Cyril nodded quickly, his eyes glued on Smart Guy's switchblade. "You have her back at ten thirty." he said. "But, um, sir, the movie ends at-" "Ten thirty. Or me and my boys here will take you on a little trip." "Make it ten." Jazz rolled her eyes and walked up to Cyril taking his arm. "Leave him alone," she said before walking out the door. Cyril lead her to a movie theater and bought tickets for "Miracle on 34th Street". Jazz raised on brow and asked about it. Cyril quickly said, "If you don't want to see it-" "No, no, I was just wondering." Cyril nodded and quickly lead her to their seats. As the lights dimmed in the large theater, Jazz lied her head on his shoulder, making Cyril blush. As the movie progressed, Jazz felt more easy around Cyril. He really was a nice Toon. A gentleman, to tell the truth, helping her and all that. Cyril gently nudged her and she looked up, her violet eyes staring into his deep emerald eyes. "Time to go. I'm sorry, but I really don't want to upset your brothers." he said. She smiled and said, "That's okay," before she stood up. She took the fox's hand and went out of the theater. They stood alone on the steps of the apartment. Jazz looked at him, and gaining some courage, kissed him on the lips before quickly going inside. Cyril stood there blushing before he smiled and jumped in the down the steps. _________________________________________________ Well, there you go. The reason I picked Miracle on 34th Street was because that was the only movie I know that was released in 1947.
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Post by Greasy on Jul 1, 2009 12:55:09 GMT -5
That with the movie is ok, I don´t know this movie, but if it´s a love story, it totally match, doesn´t it?! Well, this chapter was very nice and so romantically. Very nice done!
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Post by cooper on Jul 1, 2009 16:01:03 GMT -5
WELL DONE!!! Lawl I wonder what Stella and Olly was doing, probabl Stella like ".....?' and Olly like "Psh..... *sips some booze*." I can't wait for the next chappy!!! And aww....the goodnight kiss scene Well done!
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 16:11:04 GMT -5
Well, here's chapter twenty. _________________________________________________
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter Twenty[/glow]
As the Dodge followed Eddie's instruction's to the crime scene, Jazz talked to Cyril. "So, where you created or born?" the ferret asked, putting her head on the fox's shoulder. "Created, but my creator died to next, so...yeah." "Oh...I'm sorry, Cyril." "No, no. You didn't know." As silence followed, Jazz's eyes wondered over to Olly and she quickly cocked her head to the side and asked, "You two are dating?" Olly, who was rather...close to Greasy, quickly got away, a light blush on her face as she said, "S-so? W'at's it to ya?" Jazz only blinked and said, "But you two fight..." "So?" Jazz shrugged while Greasy looked away, whispering something in Spanish. Jazz turned back to Cyril, about to tell him something, but Stella telling her to come here stopped her. Jazz looked over at the gray furred weasel and walked over. She sat next to Stella. "Okay...what?"Jazz asked. "Look," Stella whispered, "Olly and Greasy are...dating, I guess ya could say, but Olly is kinda...embarrassed by it. She hates it w'en som'one catc'es 'em, ya know?" Jazz thought before she said, "Yeah." "Well, just don't mention it. He may not look it, but Greasy actually does 'are fer Olly. He hates it w'en she gets embarrassed." Jazz caught on. "Oh...I'm sorry." Stella nodded and put her cigar in her mouth. Jazz looked over at Greasy and Olly to see Greasy was trying to make Olly come back and sit with him. Jazz quickly felt guilty about what she said and walked over to Olly. Olly looked up as Jazz sat down. "Um, Olly?" Jazz asked. "Yea'." "I'm sorry." Olly blinked. "'bout w'at?" "What I said. I just didn't know, I'm sorry." Olly stared at Jazz before she smiled and said, "Eh, it's o'ay kid." Jazz smiled and looked over at Cyril, blushing as Olly said, "Run bac' on o'er to Romeo." Jazz went over to Cyril and sat next to him, smiling as Olly went back over to Greasy. She quickly kissed him and sat next to him while Greasy blinked in astonishment. _________________________________________________ ...I really think I just got out of Olly's character on that one scene. I just always felt Olly would be like that, so...I put it in here.
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Post by Giggles on Jul 1, 2009 16:15:56 GMT -5
OMG i am just luvin it!!!! and i just adore that jazz got her self a bf!!! thats soooo cute and i just luv romance storys! i just luv that u put them together, cause if u didnt i would have to smack u up the head!!! LOL ;D
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Post by cooper on Jul 1, 2009 16:16:22 GMT -5
HA!!! YES!! SCORE!! *raises both her arms in the air* don't worry, you got the relationship down right. Lawl, wonderful chapter, gives us like a little breather on the normal storyline (which i see people rarely do)
Lol, little romeo >:3.
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 16:17:12 GMT -5
Thanks, Skully. ;D Btw-u love writing in color, don't you?
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Post by Giggles on Jul 1, 2009 18:24:06 GMT -5
yes, yes i do and omg it was sooo odvise that Olly had something going on with Greasy, u could tell by the way they were fighting. it wasnt really fighting it was more flirting
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 18:34:08 GMT -5
Okay, but just so you know, Skully, Cooper owns Olly and Stella. ;D And thank the goddess of cherry trees I got Olly and Greasy down as a relationship! Lol.
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Post by cooper on Jul 1, 2009 18:34:21 GMT -5
Hah lawl, didn't thnk it was that obvious XD
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 19:48:36 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]Chapter Twenty-One[/glow] As Smart Guy parked the Dodge, they saw Eddie looking at a note. He looked up and said, "Looks like we got our first suspect." "Who?" Smart Guy asked. "Zaria Monroe. A Toon that owes Smith a lot of money." Smart Guy took the note and saw it was a check. He shook his head and put it in his pocket. *** Zaria's house was small. With dark blue brinks and a dark purple roof with bones all in the yard, Jazz kind of wanted to go back. Smart Guy blinked before he lightly pushed on the door. It creaked open and they walked in. Seconds later, a voice boomed, "WHO RUINS MY SLUMBER???!!!! " Jazz jumped into Cyril's arms, shocked. Seconds later, in a puff of red smoke, a she-cat appeared. Her fur was black while her hair was white. Orange eyes glared at them. She wore a red tank top with orange pants and a golden ring aroun her tail. "We're the Toon Patrol and this is Eddie Valiant." Smart Guy said. Zaria's eyes looked at them. When they landed on Psycho, they lit up and, in another puff of smoke, was next to him, her face close. "Who's this cutie?" she asked in a German accent, making Psycho blush and cover his face with his sleeves. "That's Psycho." Jazz said. "Psycho...I like that name." she said. "I-I-I like Zaria...The name." he finished quickly, peeking out. "You can call me Zari, der Zucker." "Look, doll, we got a tip that you might have killed Gregory Smith." Smart Guy said. "Tip? What tip?" "None of your buisness." Eddie said. Zaria glared. She then smiled and turned to Psycho. She batted her eyes and made small circles on his chest as she asked, "Oh, Psychy, what was the tip?" "A check." he quickly said. "Thanks, das Baby." she said. She kissed his cheek and Psycho became a puddle as Wheezy coughed, "Sissy."
Well, I made Psycho a love interest. What you guys think? Btw-hope I got German right.
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