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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 1:29:23 GMT -5
Thanks, I always wanted people on here to feel that Halo had some kind of special bond with Jazz. And now you know right. Btw-this didn't take place only two years ago in 1945, it took place like in 1942. Halo became leader so quickly because he is hard woring and proved he could get te job done right. Anyway, that was a thought that ran in Jazz's head, you know, like when people lose their memories, but get little flashbacks. That was one of those. So, Jazz knows how Rob died and knowns Halo shares a bond with her.
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 9:43:31 GMT -5
Huh, I thought it was her imagination going 'fwoooo!'. Interesting, again can't wait to read more!
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 10:53:45 GMT -5
Chapter sixteen is now ready, mon ami. And guess what? The cops finally found them. _________________________________________________
Chapter Sixteen
Jazz violet eyes shot open as the Dodge made a tight turn. The young ferret slammed against the wall while she tried to get her balance back. Jazz looked over and noticed Olly took a pistol out. The jill slammed the door open and starting shooting. Jazz looked and almost had a heart attack when she noticed it was cops. "Why are you attacking the cops?!?" Jazz yelled. "Do ya want tah go tah jail?" Olly asked, shooting. Wheezy, who was in front of Stella, quickly got his Tommy gun and started blasting away. Jazz quickly smashed herself against the wall and quickly went over to where Stella was. "What the heck is going on?!" Stella yelled. "Cops!" Jazz yelled over the noise. Smart Guy, who was driving with Psycho and Stupid up front, made another hard turn and Jazz had to sink her claws into the floor to keep still. Greasy had gotten a gun as well and was shooting. Jazz looked out and saw someone had hit the cops tire. The car did a full spin before it crashed into a building. Luckily, the driver got out. The cop quickly got his gun and started shooting as well, but no luck. The Dodge already zoomed out of town, running off into Toontown. Olly shut the doors and went over to Stella. She put the gun away and quickly asked if her cousin was alright. With a quick nod from Stella, Olly turned to Greasy. Jazz couldn't hear what they were saying, but she knew it was something she didn't need to be in. Jazz took a deep breath and thanked God when the Dodge stopped. Smart Guy opened the doors and glanced around. "Everyone alright?" With a quick nod or "yeah", Smart Guy went into the Dodge with Psycho and Stupid following. He sat down and seem to think. At this moment, Jazz didn't know what to do. She was failing as an angel. She was spouse to help them. After thinking for a long and hard moment, Jazz looked up at Smart Guy. "What about Valient?" she asked. "Wha'?" Smart Guy looked up. "Eddie Valient. If you guys can prove you've change, he-" "He'll do nothing." By now, Jazz had had enough. The ferret stood up and crossed her arms, glaring. "Look," she said, "He can help. It doesn't matter if you like or don't like. We could at least try. If not for yourself, then for everyone else in here and me, your only sister." Jazz ignored the shocked looks. She stayed glaring at Smart Guy, a stubborn look on her face. For the first time since she died, Jazz looked like how Rob made her. Smart Guy stared at Jazz for a moment before he finally shook his head and said, "Fine." _________________________________________________ Wow, everyone now knows Jazz is related to the Toon Patrol. They're about to go see Eddie Valient. WHAT could happen?
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 10:55:43 GMT -5
LAWL! OLLY IS SHOOTING THE COPS! EVERYONE JOIN IN! XD Lawl that made me laugh when she got the pistol out and everyone joins in XD Lawl you really keep me entertained Lynx, I am loving this story XD And with trying to turn the toon patrol good, I think Olly is doing more harm then good XD Or she's straightening out Greasy...we may never know
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 10:57:17 GMT -5
Thanks, cooper. I try my best. ;D Btw-how's Jazz coming along?
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 10:59:11 GMT -5
I'm right now drawing several pictures out and trying to pick which one'll look the best, but so far none's coming how I like it
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 12:04:50 GMT -5
I know how you feel. Just pick out which one you like the best. I'm sure everything you draw is awsome, I'm a fan of your art work.
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 12:09:31 GMT -5
Awesome thanks. Alrighty once i sketch a good one out I'll digitalize it
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Post by Greasy on Jun 30, 2009 13:20:59 GMT -5
i´ve read the last chaptures and must say that you have a really good talent to write intersting, entertaining and with a little bit of humor stories. It reminds me on a good american movie. It´s all included: fun, action, a little bit love humor and a small tip of sex. (in the slight way). I like it.
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 13:44:02 GMT -5
Thanks, mon ami. ;D
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 15:06:04 GMT -5
Chapter seventeen is ready. _________________________________________________
Chapter Seventeen
The way to Valiant's was hard. Especially since they had to make sure no cops found them. Finally, Smart Guy parked the Dodge in an alley with what had to be the best skill Jazz has ever seen. Jazz opened the doors and jumped out. Smart Guy came out of the Dodge as well on the driver side while Wheezy followed, his Tommy gun at his side. "You're in commission, Grease." Smart Guy said before heading down the alley. Jazz quickly caught up to her brother and peeked out of the alley. The made sure to come when it was dark. The only way to see was from the lights that glowed across the city. Papers flew across the street. Jazz looked back at Smart Guy and nodded. The weasel, followed by Jazz and Wheezy, crossed the street and quickly ran over to the apartment Eddie held his office and home. One chalkboard sign was sideways, but Smart Guy didn't bother with it. The huge black door was closed. With a gentle push, it was open. "Valiant & Valiant: Private Investigators" stood proud on the door in huge, black letters. Smart Guy glanced at Jazz and said, "You better be right about this, Angel." With that, Smart Guy knocked on the door... Minutes passed and Jazz felt as if she was being shot by a dipped bullet as every second passed. What if Eddie called the cops? What if Smart Guy started saying something stupid? What if- Before Jazz could think, the door opened. Edward "Eddie" Valiant stood shocked, his brown eyes wide. Jazz cleared her throat and said, "Mr. Valiant, I'm-" Before she could say anything, Eddie slammed the door saying, "I'm calling the cops." Jazz stared at it for a minute before she said, "Let me see your gun, Wheezy." Wheezy, unsure of what his younger sister was going to do, gave her the gun. Jazz only glanced at it before she started shooting around the knob. The golden knob fell to the floor and Jazz gave the gun back, pushing the door open. Eddie stared at them as they came in. He slammed the phone down and asked, "You know how much money it took to fix the first time you weasels did that?" Jazz sighed and grabbed a chair, rolling it over to Eddie. She climbed on top of it and said, "For the record, I'm a ferret. Now look, Mr. Valiant, these weasels changed," she glanced at them, "Well...they're trying to change." "Yeah, well then how come you guys killed off Gregory Smith?" "Who?" "The guy who had every file on every Toon known to man. You guys fingerprint was all over the place." "Mr. Valiant, anyone can copy a Toon's fingerprint. They just need a copy of that Toon's file. Now listen, they've been with me all this time. How could they do it?" Jazz asked. "How do I know you weren't with them?" he asked back. Before they could continue, a flash of light entered th room and Monoke and Halo stood in the room. Halo walked over to Eddie and placed his hands on the desk, glancing at Jazz before he spoke, "She's telling the truth, Valiant." "I know you. Your that cop that vanished five years ago." Eddie said. "Not vanish, Eddie, died. Doom killed me with dip." "Figures." Eddie muttered. "Anyway, this young ferret is telling the truth. Whatever happened, they were framed." Halo said. "What do you want me to do?" he asked. "The same thing you did with Roger Rabbit." Monoke said. "Oh no. We're not making this a "Who Framed the Weasels" thing." he said. "Mr. Valiant, think about it. If this person framed them, they must have known the weasels came back. If they knew that that they must want something." Halo said. Eddie stared at Halo for a long time. He turned to Jazz and said, "750." "750 what?" "Dollars." Jazz glanced at Smart Guy, who sighed, but nodded. _________________________________________________ End of chapter seventeen. Hope you guys liked it. I had to watch the movie again to find some things. And I JUST now realized I was spelling Eddie's last name wrong. Lol.
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Post by Greasy on Jun 30, 2009 15:24:39 GMT -5
Who framed the weasels, that makes cracking me up! This was a funny chapture! I´m intersted how Smart Guy will get 750 $, it´s very much for the 1940s.
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 15:43:03 GMT -5
Daaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaang. That's a lot of money. It's going to be hard for them to sum it up
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kishi
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Post by kishi on Jul 1, 2009 6:01:34 GMT -5
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jul 1, 2009 7:28:48 GMT -5
Yeah, kishi's right. I'll make it 100. I'm trying to make it kinda high because I want people to realize Eddie still dislikes the weasels. *shrugs* But I guess I DID kinda go over a little bit. Lol.
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