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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 29, 2009 23:06:06 GMT -5
Thanks. Did I get Stella's last name right, btw? I remember you put Ridgeby in one artwork, but titled another "Stella "Silent" Rideby". I used both artworks becuase each had a little info and looks on Stella.
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Post by cooper on Jun 29, 2009 23:15:21 GMT -5
Yep, you got her last name right  Basically you got her all down  |
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 29, 2009 23:22:13 GMT -5
YAY!!!!!!!!!!!! ;D
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Post by Eternity on Jun 29, 2009 23:27:02 GMT -5
And you partially named Wheezy after his voice actress, June Foray. Nice reference.
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 29, 2009 23:36:13 GMT -5
I know, I type too much. Lol. Chapter Eleven.
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Chapter Eleven
Now Jazz was just plain confused. First Olly was mad at the Toon Patrol, then Stella is mad at Wheezy, now they're talking to them. Mostly Jazz, but she could tell both jills were not as mad as before.
"Hey, Jazz," Stella said, "Is Wheezy smokin' a cigarette still?"
Jazz blinked and looked at Wheezy. "Yup."
Stella smirked before she said, "Sissy sticks."
"For the love of..." Wheezy muttered, still looking at the road.
Stella chuckled before she gently leaned on him, a smile on her face. Jazz cocked her head to the side, but figured she better not ruin the moment.
Jazz looked out the window and started counting the little yellow lines in the middle of the road.
One...two...three...four...five...this is getting boring...
"GREASY GARCIA!!!"
Jazz jumped and her eyes went wide as Olly yelled. Stella laughed while Wheezy only smiled.
"What?" Jazz asked.
"Greasy did something he wasn't spouse to." Wheezy said, letting smoke out of his mouth.
Jazz could only image what she did. And she shuddered before looking out the window again and counting buildings.
One...two...three...four...five...six...okay, now this is just stupid...
Jazz narrowed her eyes and slumped in her seat, knowing this was going to be a long ride...
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End of chapter eleven.
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Post by cooper on Jun 29, 2009 23:39:12 GMT -5
Nah, I love the speedy update. I agree with Eternity also! It's awesome you used the last name for the character. Nice job Lol, I'm curious on what Greasy did XDDDD. Many things can happen with Greasy.... so what was it? huh? huh? huh? *nudges lynx with elbow* And Momma Mia! You once again got Stella and Olly down right! Lawl, Stella and Wheezy are getting along. If only Olly had that power ;_; BTW, are all teh weasels in the car? Just curious  |
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 0:02:55 GMT -5
Um, yeah. I know I'm REALLY quick guys, but as I said, I love writing. Lol. What can you do. Okay, this chapter focuses around Jazz's relationship with Stella and Olly. Enjoy.
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Chapter Twelve
They finally stopped at an old and rundown hotel. The walls were rather moist, but the beds were warm and there was food that was hidden away, so...oh well.
In the room the jills shared, Jazz sat on the floor, playing with her long midnight blue hair, while Stella smoked a cigar and Olly steamed about what Greasy did.
"I can't believe 'im! I'm back fer one day and he ALREADY thinks 'bout...it!!!!" she said, angry.
"What did he do?" Jazz asked.
"You don't want to know." she muttered.
"He whispered something very naughty in 'er ear." Stella said, smiling.
"STELLA!!!"
"I'm sorry. The kid's grown on meh."
Jazz frowned and quickly said, "I'm sorry, Olly. Just sisterly curiosity."
At this, Stella opened her eyes while Olly stared at Jazz. She blinked and asked, "Sistah...?"
Jazz's eyes widen, realizing what she said. The young ferret looked down at the floor and grabbed her long tail, hugging it. She cleared her throat and said, "Well, I, uh, haven't told them, but....we were created by the same person, and, um, yeah. We're related. I'm their little sister in Toon years, but if you want to get all technical, I'm their older sister, but that don't make any sense, so-"
"We get it." Olly said.
"So, wait a minute. You, a sweet littah kid is related to 'em?" Stella asked, chewing on her cigar.
"Um...yeah...but, they don't know."
Olly blinked at Jazz. If you really looked at Jazz, you could see she did have SOME similarities to the Toon Patrol, just more ferret like. Sure, she had white fur than the usual brown and a long tail, but it was there.
"When ya gonna tell 'em?" Olly asked.
"I...don't know." Jazz said, looking away.
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End of chapter twelve. I put LOTS and, hopefully, helpful details about Jazz for cooper. Hope it helps.
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 0:11:39 GMT -5
YAY! I NOW HAVE THE CLEAR PICTURE! CHACHING! Okay now it should really help. No one minds if you post fast, that means the story is getting good and is pretty long ;D
Lawl...moist walls :B
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 0:12:56 GMT -5
Lol. I know. ;D
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 0:31:28 GMT -5
Guess what? Chapter thirteen. Ha. This is now in heaven.
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Chapter Thirteen
Halo glared at the image of Earth below his feet. It's been long, too long for Jasmine. The black wolf turned to Monoke and barked, "What is taking so dang long?"
"Well, Halo, Jazz-"
Halo glared at him.
"...right, Jasmine did just find out she's related to the Toon Patrol."
"What!?!?"
Halo glared at Monoke, his orange eyes like fie while Monoke seemed not to care. The cat' dull blue eyes closed and and he crossed his arms.
"Halo," he began, "both you and I know Jasmine was going to find out somehow. Better show her now then later."
Halo became silent. He turned his back on Monoke and put his hands behind his back, his eyes staring out into the stars.
"Did you...tell her about...how he died...the truth..." he asked.
"...no. I made a promise to you long ago I never would." Monoke said.
Halo nodded and, for the first time in a long time, wished Jasmine...no, Jazz was back...
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Short, I know, but I just felt I was ignorin Halo and Monoke for too long. Hope none of you minded.
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 0:34:40 GMT -5
It's okay, it adds more depth and story to it Now it's on a cliffhanger though! I wonder how he did die. It's getting intense. Man, I can't wait for the next chapter. So intense!  |
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 0:55:20 GMT -5
You're in luck, cooper. Here is chapter fourteen. ;D
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Chapter Fourteen
Jazz stared out into the darkness. Why? Why was it so dark? In a flash of light, everything changed. Jazz shielded her eyes as the light became brighter.
After a moment, Jazz peeked out and blinked. The room she was in looked like a giant pillow, with comfy looking walls and floor. In the corner, with a straight jacket on, was a man. His skin was pale while his hazel eyes stared down at the floor.
The door opened and Jazz looked over, shocked. Whoever opened the door couldn't see her, though.
Doom walked in, a smug smile on his face. Jazz glared at him.
"Robert McKladcore?" he asked.
Rob didn't reply, he just glared.
Doom shrugged and made a motion for someone to come in. What Jazz saw shocked her.
A wolf Toon with fur as black as night and eyes as orange as the sun walked in.
Before Jazz could yell or do anything, she was awaken.
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"Jazz? Jazz, kid, wake up!"
Jazz sat up with a start and held her chest. She panted for a minute before she looked up into the puzzled eyes of Olly.
"You okay?" Olly asked.
"Y-yeah."
Jazz slowly crawled out of the bed. She did her best not to look scared, if only not to worry her new friend. The Toon ferret waited as Stella and Olly got ready before she went into the lobby of the hotel, where the males were waiting. Wheezy quickly wrapped his arm around Stella before he whispered something to her that Jazz didn't catch. Jazz waited beside Smart Guy while Greasy talked to Olly, and seem to make her mad...
"I hear ya." Smart Guy said.
"What?"
"About...you. Last night."
Jazz became silent. She didn't what to say. So Smart Guy finally knew.
"How...did our creator die?" he asked.
"I was told he died of lack of food and water, but...I suddenly think that's not the truth."
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DUN, DUN, DUUUUUNNNN!!!!!!! Smart Guy now knows about Jazz and Jazz finds out what Monoke said was a lie! What could happen next?!?!
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 1:05:26 GMT -5
YOU SPIN ME RIGHT ROUND BABY RIGHT ROUND LIKE A RECORD BABY RIGHT ROUND ROUND ROUND! You....are so awesome... (I have no idea how many times I said that XD) And what is Doom doing to Rob!? D:< And what's Halo doing!? Grrrrr D:< Hmm.....me thinks that Wheezy has spoken foul works amongst Stella's ears >:3 And lawl Greasy again is failing at something XD I wonder what he's talking to HER about XD AND YES!!! WHAT COULD HAPPEN NEXT!? SHOW USS!! |
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Post by KrazyRandomness on Jun 30, 2009 1:16:18 GMT -5
Lol. Okay. This is chapter fifteen. _________________________________________________ Chapte Fifteen It happen again. This time when Jazz was sitting in the back of the Dodge... *** Jazz stared shocked as Halo blinked at Rob. The wolf turned to Doom and asked, "This is the man who is made Toons for pure evil?" "Yes and I'm happy to say I have one of his Toons deleted." Halo nodded and turned to Rob. He laied a hand on his sholder and said, "It's okay." Rob looked at him, staring into his orange eyes. "He's lying." "What?" Halo asked. "He's lying. It's all a lie. I don't create Toons for evil. He killed Jazz. He killed my daughter! He took my sons!" Rob yelled. Halo stared at Rob. He looked over at Doom when her heard a "click" and his orange eyes widen at the gun. As Doom pulled the trigger, Halo got in the way. The bullet shot into his arm, but the wolf only flinched. "What are you doing!?" he yelled. "Stopping this. This man is a lonatic." "You're the lonatic! Shooting him like that!" Doom only stared at Halo for a minute before he sighe took out anoter gun. He pointed it at Halo and the wolf blinked, saying, "You think that's gonna work?" "Oh, but this isn't a normal bullet. This is a...Dipped bullet." With one "bang", Halo fell to the floor, cluthing his chest. He looked up at Doom and Doom smiled sickenly. Halo then closed his eyes and fell to the ground... _________________________________________________ Here ya go. Why Halo was there and now how he died. I bet you can guess what Doom did to Rob... |
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Post by cooper on Jun 30, 2009 1:24:51 GMT -5
......... DOOM SHALL PAY! Why he gotta do that!? Man....if I was Olly and I had dip then I would.....GRRRRRRRRRRRRR!!! Man, I hate Doom more then ever.....wonderful and impressive chap Lynx, this story is getting better and better |
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