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Post by Lugia on Jul 14, 2008 19:56:09 GMT -5
YAY!! My first fan fic!! ;D This fan fic is a horror story and it's mainly about Stupid!! Enjoy!!  Chapter 1 It was morning. All the weasels were in the living room. Slimy was playing Checkers with Smartass. Greasy was reading magazines about cute girls. Psycho was sitting in front of the window. Flasher was watching tv. The only weasel who was not in the living room was Stupid. Stupid was in his own room. "Ooooh.. I wish I had something to play with!!" he sighed. Stupid has no toys. He only has a shelf full of kid's books, and a gold fish. Then, Smartass yelled, "Stupid, take out the trash, will ya!?" "Okay, boss!!" Stupid yelled. He ran to the living room and grabbed the trash bag out of the trash can. He tied it up and ran outside. The rubbish truck didnt came yet. "Oh well." Stupid sighed. He left the trash bag with the other trash on the grass and left. Then, Stupid noticed some thing. It was a cute doll. It had cute eyes with pretty eye lashes to match, a red and black dress, a red ribbon on its long black hair, and a cute smile. The doll was sitting there next to the trash bags. Stupid grabbed the doll. "Why would any one throw this adorable doll away?" Stupid said. He carried the doll back to the house. "Hey, guys!! Look what I found!!" Stupid yelled as he holds the doll up. The doll caught all the weasel's attention. There was silence. Psycho began to laugh. Greasy joined in. Even Smartass laughed even though it wasnt funny to him. Flasher just stood there. Slimy laughed too. Stupid was speechless. All of a sudden, the door opened. It was Wheezy. "I bought all the food you need, boss." he said. "Hey, Wheezy!! Check out Stupid's girly doll!!" Slimy hollered. Wheezy looked at it and began to laugh. Stupid groaned and went upstairs. To be continued..... |
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Post by The Unknown on Jul 14, 2008 20:27:26 GMT -5
"My name's Talky Tina, and I don't like you very much." (Karma if anyone knows this one!)
Good start, but I'm seriously freaked out about the doll. o.o
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Post by Weasel Freak on Jul 14, 2008 21:40:16 GMT -5
Good start.
Talking Tina was a doll that did everything. It's a lifelike creation of a human but is made out of plastic and springs and it had a painted smile.
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Post by Greasy on Jul 15, 2008 4:26:23 GMT -5
The doll seems to be cute, but I bet they all will change their minds if the know her real character, hehe!
Just go ahead, great start!
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Post by Lugia on Jul 15, 2008 19:31:52 GMT -5
Okay, here's Chapter 2!!
Chapter 2
Stupid entered his room. "This is my room," he said to the doll. "I'll name you....Cristy!!" he continued. Stupid seated Cristy on a small chair. "You are so cute!!" Stupid said. Then he left the room.
When Stupid came back, he saw the doll on the bed. "Hey,..when did I put Cristy on my bed??" Stupid wondered. Stupid grabbed Cristy and seated her on the chair again. "Stay." Stupid commanded. Stupid sat on his bed and watched the doll.Then he fell asleep.
It was night time. All the weasels were asleep. Cristy was still on the chair. Her eyes began to glow. She fell off. Then she got up. She walked and walked. She opened the door. She walked in the hall way. She went inside Flasher's room. The doll grabbed a switch blade. Before she strikes, Flasher woke up. "WHOA!!" he yelled. Cristy made her first move. Flasher dodged like if he was playing Dodge Ball. "You think you're better than me!?" Flasher yelled. He kept dodging and kicked the doll hard. Cristy fell to the floor. Then, the door opened.Then the lights turned on. It was Stupid. "What are you doing to Cristy!?" he cried out. "That stupid doll came in my room!!" Flasher yelled. "Yeah right!!" Stupid yelled. He took his tongue out. Stupid grabbed the doll. He noticed the switch blade on her hand. "And you were trying to kill her with the knife thingy!!" Stupid yelled. Flasher rolled his eyes up. "Hmph!!" Stupid said. He slammed the door. Stupid came back to his room. "Dont worry, Cristy!! You'll be safe now." he whispered. Stupid went back to sleep with the doll.
The next morning, Stupid woke up early. "Good morning, Cristy!!" Stupid yawned. But she was not there. Stupid was shocked. He ran to the living room. And he gasped!!
To be continued....
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Post by Greasy on Jul 16, 2008 7:04:02 GMT -5
I think, eh, no, I´m sure something terrible cruel scary has happend.
Can´t wait, wanna read more!
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Post by The Unknown on Jul 16, 2008 13:19:36 GMT -5
Great scene!
Of course, the whole doll-with-a-knife scene didn't soothe my imagination, as I was reading chapter two at Two in the morning...with the lights off. >_<
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Post by Lugia on Jul 16, 2008 21:05:50 GMT -5
Here's Chapter 3!!
Chapter 3
It was almost unbelievable of what Stupid just saw. Greasy, Slimy, Smartass, Wheezy, Psycho, and of course, Flasher, were there. He was holding the doll up. "This freaky doll tried to kill me last night!!" Flasher said. All the weasels gasped. "We all must get rid of it before any one gets hurt." he took out a match. "NO!!!!!" Stupid yelled. He jumped up and got the doll. "You cant hurt her!!"
Flasher sighed and said, "Stupid, if you keep that doll forever, one of us will be dead!!!" Stupid stook his tongue out again. He ran out side. "Is that true, Cristy?" Stupid sniffed. "Is it true that you really tried to kill Flasher?" The doll didnt say anything.
"Flasher never lies to anybody." Stupid continued. He slowly came back inside. "Give me the doll, Stupid." Flasher said. "NO!!" Stupid yelled. "Stupid, just give it to him. You can buy another one." Smartass said. "I cant!!" Stupid yelled. "Would you still keep her if you saw this!?" Greasy yelled. It was a poster. It said:
Warning!! Killer doll on the loose.
The picture was exactly like the doll. "No!" Stupid said. "It's a mistake!! I'm pretty sure there are lots of those!!" "No." Flasher said. "Your Cristy is the only doll in this world." Stupid looked at the doll. "Okay." Stupid said. He was about to hand the doll to Flasher until the doll leaped. "Whoa!!" Stupid yelled. The doll grabbed her switch blade again.
This time, she was after Smartass. "Boss!!" Greasy yelled. "Yikes!!" Smartass said. He dodged. Then, he grabbed his pistol. "If you move, I'll push the trigger!!" Smartass said. "Cristy.." Stupid said. "Why!?" The doll turned around and aimed for Greasy. "Better run!!" he yelled. Greasy ran fast. The doll ran faster.
"Just push the trigger, boss!!" Psycho hollered. "Okay." Smartass replied. He did it, and he missed. He kept shooting at the doll, but the doll was just too good. "Dang it!!" Smartass snapped.
To be continued...........
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Post by Greasy on Jul 17, 2008 4:44:49 GMT -5
Poor Greasy, hopefulle he get less of her.
And hopefully Smart Guy can blow her head of.
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Post by The Unknown on Jul 17, 2008 17:01:20 GMT -5
I pray that this story has a happy ending...with no doll.
I'm not going to be able to sleep easy tonight. I can't stand to be in the same room with those kind of dolls...at night. >.o
I'm not saying that your story is awful, Lugia. I do enjoy it, and the suspense is killing me. I can't wait for more! I just need to get into the habit of not reading this stuff at night. =3
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Post by Lugia on Jul 17, 2008 17:46:27 GMT -5
Chapter 4
Smartass was getting tired. "Wheezy, use your tommy gun!!" he yelled out. "Sure, boss!" Wheezy said. He grabbed his weapon and aimed for the doll. The bullet hit the doll's arm. The arm fell out. "Now shoot it in the head!!!" Smartass said. "I cant!" Wheezy yelled. The doll dodged and dodged. Then she jumped. She got Wheezy on the leg. "Gaah!!" Wheezy yelled. He dropped the tommy gun.
"What do we do!?" Smartass yelled. "I'll try!!" Slimy said. He got his blackjack and bangs it at the doll. But it didnt work.
To be continued....
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Post by The Unknown on Jul 17, 2008 17:50:37 GMT -5
I don't mean to be rude [again], but please wait until you have a much longer chapter. I get the feeling that you're a bit anxious to get your stuff up (I'm the same way with Orphan), but it's better to have something long to read instead of a small paragraph. You get more positive comments that way.  The suspense!! Grah!! |
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Post by Larissa Gaines. (: on Jul 20, 2008 17:35:20 GMT -5
SCARY. but awesome at the same time!
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Post by Greasy on Jul 29, 2008 5:04:12 GMT -5
That´s right, but your fantasy is great.
You have good ideas.
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Post by Just Plain Rydell on Jul 29, 2008 5:20:17 GMT -5
This story kicks ass, Lugia. Se la rifa. XD
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