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Post by Eternity on Nov 15, 2007 9:19:33 GMT -5
How could Smart Guy know all along? I'm certain he didn't know any more than the others did.
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Post by Eternity on Nov 15, 2007 17:29:22 GMT -5
Sorry, I just didn't get the whole thing. But I do now.
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Post by Eternity on Dec 7, 2007 16:34:46 GMT -5
I'm sorry to say, I'm having writer's block again. The next couple of chapters would involve Smart Guy's pranks and then a heated arguement between Maddy and the other four weasels about how they could be so heartless as to want to destroy their fellow toons for ten percent of the profits that Doom promised them, and then Maddy revealing the truth about Doom's identity. I have developed a couple of lines though.
"Look Rabbit, it was nothin' personal." This is said by Smart Guy to Roger when confronted with how he had hunted down Roger like an animal. "Maddy, you don't understand! My boys were starvin', so I had no choice!" Smart Guy exclaimed. The look on Maddy's face told him that she wasn't buying it.
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Post by Eternity on Dec 7, 2007 17:55:15 GMT -5
Your ideas and thoughts sound good, and I don't think Roger would forgive the weasels so easily, and Smartguy's line to Maddy is such an obvious lie, Smartguy was really stupid if he thought she was going to fall for that one. I like that line. An idea I got is that maybe the weasels, one by one, begin to become good friends with Maddy, like Stupid, until Smartguy is the only one who stands alone and isn't a friend to her, and then he maybe begins to change, what do you say about my idea? I've planned that from the start that they would become friends with Maddy. I've also had this theory that after the whole acme-will-dipping-toontown incident, the weasels' families disowned them all out of shame. Smart Guy figures that because Maddy is a child, she'll fall for anything. But Maddy is smarter than she looks! I came up with an idea about Stupid making an apology to Roger, but Roger refuses to forgive Stupid. "Sometimes 'sorry' isn't enough!" Roger yells. And of course, Maddy defends Stupid. Should Maddy and SG (Smart Guy) get into a fist fight?
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Post by Eternity on Dec 8, 2007 8:11:19 GMT -5
He makes insults about her grandfather, and she loses her temper. Of course, SG's a ghost, so Maddy can't hurt him and he taunts her about that, but he can hurt her plenty.
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Post by Eternity on Dec 9, 2007 19:35:06 GMT -5
Originally, I was going to have this bit where Maddy tries to explain DNA testing to the weasels.
"Then I guess it's a good thing that they didn't have DNA testing in 1947, huh? DNA testing would have stopped your evil plan before you could've even pulled it off!"
Of course, the weasels have no idea what DNA is, let alone DNA testing. Maddy tries to explain genetics and DNA but gets isn't very good at it, being only 10 years old.
I decided this was cutting into the story and I decided to cut the whole thing.
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Post by Sewer Weasel on Dec 14, 2007 11:19:51 GMT -5
You SHOULD do that. It'll be funny.
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Post by Eternity on Dec 21, 2007 13:37:39 GMT -5
I've already established that Maddy and Stupid are friends. They become very close over the course of the story. I've come up with this idea that Roger gets very, very jealous of Stupid, because he feels like he's being replaced as Maddy's best toon friend. What do ya'll think?
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